Week 1. My Recent Wikipedia Edits - Jeong seolah (정설아)

I made several edits to the Wikipedia page for 'Daegu'. 

Daegu, located in the southeastern part of South Korea, is the third-largest urban area in the country, following Seoul and Busan. With a population exceeding 2.3 million, it is the fourth-largest metropolitan city in South Korea and the second-largest in the Yeongnam region after Busan. Often referred to together with the surrounding North Gyeongsang Province as Daegu-Gyeongbuk, this region is home to over 5 million residents. Known for its rich history and vibrant economy, Daegu stands as a key player in South Korea's cultural and industrial landscape.

Below is a summary of the changes I contributed.

1) Summarize and link

Sights Section: 

- Improved clarity by changing “mountains keep many traditional temples” to “the mountains keep many traditional temples.”

Mosque Controversy Section:

 - Simplified a sentence by removing “and of the authorities.”

Festivals Section: 

- Made phrasing smoother by changing “those have” to “they have"

- revised “are the contemporary” to “are contemporary.”

Downtown and Shopping Section: 

- Corrected grammar by changing “its own” to “their own.”

Fashion Industry Section:

- Improved sentence structure by adding “which” to the phrase “means.”

Economy Section: 

- Corrected preposition usage by changing “in the west” to “on the west.”

Politics Section: 

- Updated grammar by changing “heads of city's” to “heads of the city's.”

Mosque Controversy Section (continued): 

- Used the correct article by changing “construction of” to “the construction of.”

Joseon Section: 

- Corrected adverb usage by changing “current” to “currently.”

These edits primarily focused on improving grammar, clarity, and consistency throughout the article.

here is the link. 

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Daegu#Sights

2) Any new, interesting, or unusual items learned

One particularly fascinating aspect of Daegu's early history is the discovery of Dalgubeol, the ancient chiefdom or walled-town polity that existed during the Proto–Three Kingdoms period. According to historical records, Dalgubeol eventually became part of the Silla kingdom by the fifth century. What makes this particularly intriguing is that the remnants of the ancient walls still exist today, and archaeological excavations in the current Dalseong Park have uncovered relics from this period. The fact that such an ancient, organized society existed in Daegu is not only a reflection of the area’s historical significance but also highlights how Daegu was already a center of political and cultural activity long before it became a major part of the Silla kingdom.

3) Identify at least one question, concern, or discussion angle

There is a concern about whether the small grammatical and phrasing changes I made actually improve the clarity and readability of the text, and how important these changes are in the context of collaborative platforms like Wikipedia.